Hi Alia, I really like the title of your story. It fits the prompt image really well. You start your story well by using “inclusive” language, “Hey, guys…” This makes the reader feel like you are addressing them personally. I think it is good too that you made it sound like a report that you might hear on the radio or TV. “This is one of the most creepiest…” makes the reader think this is a really bad thing. Well done in creating such a scary picture.
Hi Alia, I really like the title of your story. It fits the prompt image really well. You start your story well by using “inclusive” language, “Hey, guys…” This makes the reader feel like you are addressing them personally. I think it is good too that you made it sound like a report that you might hear on the radio or TV. “This is one of the most creepiest…” makes the reader think this is a really bad thing. Well done in creating such a scary picture.