Well done! What a great entry! You have really captured the man’s feelings very well, using words like “torture” and “slops.” I also liked the way that you started with a simple sentence to grab the reader’s attention. A very effective technique that is used by lots of writers. Keep up the good work!
Hi Dirik,
Well done! What a great entry! You have really captured the man’s feelings very well, using words like “torture” and “slops.” I also liked the way that you started with a simple sentence to grab the reader’s attention. A very effective technique that is used by lots of writers. Keep up the good work!
Yanalie (Team 100)