The day he was tree

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3 Responses to The day he was tree

  1. dirik says:

    I really like your story’s dalij please right some more I really enjoy it

  2. buluh1 says:

    I like how you made the reader read on by saying no-one opened the window. You can improve on using adjectives and adverbs. Thank you

  3. Mrs. Trivedi-Ziemba (Team 100 WC, USA) says:

    Dalij,

    You have created a fast paced story.

    I am unclear about the transition from dog coming back with ten pound note & the glass window. Did he found the note in the hole or the tunnel he dug brought you to the glass window? Your story has a lot of promise. You may wish to develop it further.

    Happy writing.

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