I really like your story’s dalij please right some more I really enjoy it
I like how you made the reader read on by saying no-one opened the window. You can improve on using adjectives and adverbs. Thank you
You have created a fast paced story.
I am unclear about the transition from dog coming back with ten pound note & the glass window. Did he found the note in the hole or the tunnel he dug brought you to the glass window? Your story has a lot of promise. You may wish to develop it further.
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